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Post by むちゃRABU❤ on Mar 13, 2015 15:52:41 GMT 9
My take on the English version:
EDIT and the Japanese version:
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Post by Graeme Howard on Mar 13, 2015 15:55:36 GMT 9
Mucha!!
You need to sort your capitalization out. There's no consistency!!
Panic!!
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Post by G-Rex on Mar 13, 2015 15:58:29 GMT 9
My take on the English version: ARTSCAPE SAPPORO Artistic Encounters ~ Seeing and Experiencing Art within the City ~ aight this is fine Rejuvenation Spaces ~ Refresh your mind and body ~ tight Wintery Adventures ~ Enjoying/Fun activities in a large snowy city ~ i like Wintery (Wintry???) Adventures, but i think you need to make your own subtitle, cos that sounds both vague and translated. what is it that you want to promote? Enchanting Nightscapes ~ A glowing night view of interwoven lights ~ Enchanting Nightscapes is tight. not sure about "interwoven" lights though. do we have a better word? Flowers in the City ~ Bright colors defining the seasons ~ same thing for the subtitle as the wintery adventures; maybe something like "A palette of colours for every season" or something artsy like that. geddit??? painter's palette? Soaking in the outskirts ~ More than just a hot spring town ~ tight
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Post by むちゃRABU❤ on Mar 13, 2015 16:02:36 GMT 9
What is tight supposed to mean ._. Also, graeme, fixed the capitalization thing.
Kay rethinking the subtitles.
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Post by Graeme Howard on Mar 13, 2015 16:03:29 GMT 9
tight = good
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Post by むちゃRABU❤ on Mar 13, 2015 16:12:50 GMT 9
fixed also because of and
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Post by Graeme Howard on Mar 13, 2015 16:35:24 GMT 9
just a last minute comment
since there are multiple enchanting nightscapes i would probably make it ~ Glowing night views of interlacing lights ~
cuz it's not just the one
right?
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Post by G-Rex on Mar 13, 2015 16:58:12 GMT 9
no there's only one view
and
m. night shyamalan
there's only one light
and only one night
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